A very helpful article!
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Like a Lactose Intolerant prefers his pizza minus the gut-churning cheese, I want my dialogue devoid of dairy.
Have you ever heard agents or editors say they flip to the first section of dialogue and if it’s cheesy, they don’t bother with the read?
Here are five signs of cheesy dialogue.
I’ve used generic NO and YES examples below and put them in italics to distinguish from my comments.
Unless English is your second language, or your character has passed the age of eighty, almost everyone uses contractions when they speak.
NO:“We are hitting the club tonight. What is up with you not wanting to dance anymore?”
YES:“We’re hitting the club tonight. What’s up with you not wanting to dance anymore?”
Contractions make speech natural and…
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